“My Education, My Future” Structure
- Attention Getter = “Hello everyone . . . how is everybody doing today?”
-Simple enough question that Obama got the children’s attention effectively.
2. Link to Audience = “I know that for many of you, today is the first day of
school. And for those of you in kindergarten, or starting middle or high school, it’s your first day in a new school, so it’s understandable if you’re a little nervous. I imagine there are some seniors out there who are feeling pretty good right now, with just one more year to go. And no matter what grade you’re in, some of you are probably wishing it were still summer, and you could’ve stayed in bed just a little longer this morning.”
-Obama links himself to the school children by letting them know he understands where they are coming from.
3. Credibility Statement = “I know that feeling. When I was young, my family lived overseas. I lived in Indonesia for a few years, and my mother didn’t have the money to send me where all the American kids went to school. Which she thought it was important for me to keep up with an American education. So she decided to teach me extra lessons herself, Monday through Friday – but because she had to go to work, the only time that she could do it was at 4:30 in the morning”
-Obama’s credibility statement is weak because his situation was quite different from that of the students, but it does show that he knew how hard it was to stick with school.
4. Preview = “And that’s what I want to focus on today: the responsibility each you
has for your education.”
-Obama’s preview isn’t quite broad enough because the speech is mainly about
student’s responsibility to their country through their education, not just their responsibility for their own education. However, I think this was good for the speech because it would likely be overwhelming to immediately tell the kids they are affecting our country each time they do their homework.
1. Everyone has potential.
2. Whatever you do in life will require an education.
3. We all face challenges in life that affect our school.
4. Set goals and commit to fulfill them.
5. We all fail at one point or another, but we should learn from our failure and try again.
6. America is made greater by those that that don’t quit.
1. Restates Summary = “So today, I want to ask you, what’s your contribution going to be? What problems are you going to solve? What discoveries will you make? What will a president who comes here in twenty or fifty or one hundred years say about what all of you did for this country?”
- When Obama restates his summary he includes more of what the summary really is instead of his original “The responsibility each or you has for your education”. This is good because it brings a better conclusion to the paper than going back to the understatement that this speech is only about your responsibility to yourself.
2. Link to Attention Getter = It was not in the speech, but I don’t think it affects the speech because he concludes talking about “you”, and how “you” will make a difference.